Revision essay

Revisionessay

Culturalartifact

Revision

Thedocument brings about an argument on how internet usage is partiallyharmful and also partially helpful. The document, however, fails toput across a boundary to which once crossed internet usage seizes tobe beneficial. The document need to be rectified so that it willclearly reveal the extent to which internet users should make use ofit so as to be of importance to them (Kaplan &amp Haenlein, 2010).By so doing the document would be of greater importance to thereaders that it is currently. The document analyzes some ofimplications such as losing relationships and jobs, as a result, ofthe use of social media, but fails to explain how people may end upin such a situation. The document needs to be revised so that it willexpound on this aspect (Nicole et al, 2014).

Thedocument indicates that the social media can be used to impart eitherpositive or negative impacts to the users depending on the contentthat that user receives online. However, I failed to address how theusers should program their social media so that they will bereceiving only information that will impart positive impacts. I needto include in the on the safe modes of using the internet to preventthe users from accessing negative contents. The document alsohighlighted that internet use has become very cheap such that allpeople of ages can access it however, in an ethical perspectiveinternet use to young people is unhealthy. The document needs to berevised so that it will address the definite age to which users mustattain so as to use the internet. I would also include in the essayhow age and responsibility interrelate since age has something to dowith responsible internet handling (Morgan &amp Cotton, 2003).

Arrangement

Iarranged the document the document’s content in such a manner itreveals how the use of internet interrelates with the psychology andsocial aspects of the user. The document’s arrangement is fairsince the content is comprehensively analyzed. The arrangement of thedocument gave me a golden opportunity to channel my ideas in a broadway and touch on crucial aspects that are involved in the use ofsocial media (Kraut et al., 1998). A good example is how thepsychology of the users can get affected adversely, as a result, ofunhealthy internet use and, on the other hand, can improve, as aresult, of healthy use of internet.

Invention

Whiledeveloping this document a thorough research was essential. I madeuse of researched recent journals which greatly helped me tounderstand to what extent internet is currently used, the mainreasons that contribute to adverse effects and how internet use canbe managed (Ellison,et al., 2014).I administered some questionnaire on internet users so as tounderstand the experiences of the internet users on the ground. Iadministered my relatives, friends as well as colleagues.

Delivery

Thedelivery of my essay will be with the help of various available mediasuch as journals, magazines, radios and televisions. However, I wouldprefer making use of the radio to present my information since itwill reach and help many people simultaneously (Kraut et al., 1998).I can alternatively upload it on the internet to be read by theinternet users and hence I will have delivered the information.

Style

Inthe document I made use of an argumentative style in presenting thepoints. The style helped me very well in revealing both sides of theinternet usage that is its positive as well as negative impacts. Ithelped me to describe the negative impacts resulting from the use ofinternet and then counter argue and describe how important use ofinternet is to the users. For example, I managed to show how use ofinternet adversely affects the social life of an individual makingthat person completely antisocial while, on the other hand, recordshow it helps some other people to transform from antisocial beings tosocial (Ellison,et al., 2014).

Myonline interaction compared to my real life

Revision

Inthe document I discussed the steps that I usually follow whenselecting and making friends both in my real and online lives. In thedocument I managed to indicate that I first scrutinize my friendsbefore adding them as friends. However, I failed to indicate thestrategies that I usually make use of when scrutinizing my friends.The document needs some revision on that aspect such that it willclearly describe my strategies of scrutinizing friends. I alsorecorded that I do not understand why some people portray differingtraits in their online and real lives. However, it is not logicexpressing real traits to online friends whom one does not physicallyknow since some of them could become a threat to my life and hencesome revision is essential on that aspect.

Ialso indicated that I make use privacy in my social media throughstrong passwords. However, I failed to reveal how safe my socialmedia is from being intruded with the rising hacking phenomenon inthe world today. I therefore, need to revise the document such thatit will address how safe my social media is from hacked. The documentwill also need some revision to address the main importance ofenhancing privacy in social media. It is because many would arguethat the main intention of social media is interacting. The documenthence needs to be revised so that it will clarify the necessity ofsocial media’s security.

Arrangement

Inthis document I addressed the relationship that exists between theissue of real and online social life. The document reveals on how Ihandle information retrieved from people outside his circle. Thearrangement has enabled me to reveal how I manage to balance both myonline and real social life. The arrangement of the document has alsoenabled me to give the statistics of the social media sites I aminvolved in as well as their communication trends.

Invention

Inthis document I had to critically the scenarios that have taken placein my both and online and real social life. The interactions that Ihave held played a major role in developing the document.Some friends that I had added revealed an aspect of becoming a threatagainst me. The scenario created the necessity of putting boundarieson the information I always disclose to my friends.

Delivery

Iwill make use of various available media such as magazines, radiosand televisions to deliver his essay to the targeted group. I would,however, radio than other modes of delivering information simplybecause the information will reach majority of the targeted groupsimultaneously. Alternatively I can upload it on the internet to beread by the internet users and hence I will have delivered theinformation. The internet will also give the public a chance tochannel their feedback hence being one of the efficient modesdelivering information.

Style

Inthis document I made use of comparative style to express my ideas. Inthe entire document, I address the events that take place in myonline friendship in comparison with what takes place in my real lifesituation as far as friendship aspects are concerned. For instance, Iconsidered the strategies I usually make use of whenever I amselecting friends. In comparison, I described in the document that myfirst step is scrutinizing friends both in my real and online sociallife. The aspect has successfully enabled me to bring out my ideas ina very comprehensive way.

References

Kaplan,A. M., &amp Haenlein, M. (2010). Users of the world, unite! Thechallenges andopportunities of Social Media. BusinessHorizons,(53) pages 59—68. Retrieved From,http://michaelhaenlein.com/Publications/Kaplan,%20Andreas%20-%20Users%20of%20the%20world,%20unite.pdf

Kraut,R., Patterson, M., Lundmark, V., et al. (1998). Internet paradox:asocial technology that reduces social involvement and psy-chologicalwell-being? AmericanPsychologist,(53):1017–31.

McKenn,aKYA., Green, AS., &amp Gleason, MEJ. (2002). Relationship formationon the Internet: What’s the big attraction? Journalof Social Issues,58:9–31

Morgan,C. &amp Cotton, S.R. (2003). The relationship between Internetactivities and depressive symptoms in a sample of college freshmen.CyberPsychology&amp Behavior,(6):133–42.

NicoleB. Ellison, et al. (2014). CultivatingSocial Resources on Social Network Sites: Facebook RelationshipMaintenance Behaviors and Their Role in Social Capital Processes.RetrievedFrom, http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/jcc4.12078/full